Ways To Lead A Narration

We start from the end and we go to the beginning you know different ways like that so just thinking about where you want to start and end the story it can can shape your essay you know many different ways and can help help you do that so now I want to talk about SH structuring in general not just literacy narratives so this can help you with all your essays and and different different assignments that we’re doing so like I say here this is not an exact science because writing is so fluid it changes and it’s so subjective that sometimes rules are made to be broken but there there are some especially for beginning writers general rules of thumb that can really help you start and finish your essays.

So I’m gonna look at the major elements of an essay and I’m sure you you’ve heard these at least in passing but we’re going to go over them and kind of you know what the what the different parts are meant to do what they can do and and kind of what kind of shape they have so the introduction there are many different ways you can do an introduction like I said you can start it like you can think about starting at the end which is it incredibly attention-grabbing maybe even starting in the middle of a scene which is also attention-grabbing so the first and foremost this is the first thing that your reader is going to encounter of your writing so you want to make it interesting enough to pull them in since you also want to be informative sometimes sometimes especially in the later essays that we write sa-2 and sa-3 you may not have room to be as attention-grabbing and you know humorous or maybe even emotional and it you have to be a little more informative so the introduction would be informative attention-grabbing tone.

Setting what I mean by that is the introduction as being the first thing that people read of your essay will set the tone so if your introduction is funny then people expect to the rest of the essay to be funny if it isn’t funny then you know I mean the rest of the essay isn’t funny but the introduction is funny it kind of sets it off balance so you have to think about what kind of tone you are setting in the beginning of your essay because that will you know that will dictate the rest of the essay and what people expect of it so you really want to think about what kind of tone you’re setting so the another thing that the introduction does is it can be an overview of of the entire essay so when we when we get into the textual analysis and the research paper this is going to fit in much more with that you you want to give the reader a sense of what’s to come.

Don`t Make a Generic Essay

You might sound like you have a great personality and you’re an awesome social person but you know how is that good for a student in a university house they’re going to reflect when you come to college so you don’t want to be conversational and you do want to be fun to read you definitely don’t want to keep it professional because you’re not admitted yet you’re trying to get admitted and you’re trying to show that you know how to write something well and at the same time keep the reader engaged and let your personality shine through so I know it sounds kind of complicated but if you’re just being yourself. There`s plenty of info on Edusson.

And then you give your paper to someone your essay to someone to just kind of tell you what they think about it then you’re probably going to be going if you give your essay to five people and all five people tell you different things but they all say at the beginning is boring then you know you better believe that at the beginning it’s boring because be five people tell you that so it’s like from that and it’s also important how you’re writing not just what you’re writing but how are you writing it so like I said you know don’t use Dell use slang like that that’s not going to help you at all and of course those are any bad words or like anything.

Like that also be specific give specific examples make it about you don’t just be generic and vague it’s good to explain what matters to you and why if you’re talking about how dance is the most important thing in your life because it has taught you discipline don’t just leave it at that explain how the discipline that dancing jazz has taught you you’ve been able to carry that you like taking care of your little sister and like being there with your mom is a way in business and things like that in addition to that you should also keep in mind that because you want to make this all about you and you want to make a unique it’s probably not a good idea to use cliches um if there is something that you just don’t know how else to explain other than you said.

Cliche like hard work beats talent if count doesn’t work hard then by all means use it because you know it really reflects what you were talking about but the problem with cliches is that a lot of times we just write them and don’t explain them and don’t you know relate them to us as the student who is applying and so that’s what it’s kind of a mistake to use a cliche but just in general you know I’m sure admissions counselors are tired of just reading the same old leg from every bad thing you always learned something good you know like yes I’m sure I’m sure they get that with like a bunch of essays and you don’t want to add on to that.

Top Ten Tips for Writing a College Essay

Start early

Be yourself

  • Write about the “true blue” you! Don’t be phony; admission officers see “right
    through” phony!
  • Writing a “boring” essay will bore the college admissions officer

Don’t plagiarize

  • Do not use others’ work!
  • College admissions officers have seen it all; you will not fool anyone!

Take a risk

  • Admission officers are looking for students who are a “good fit!”
  • Do not be afraid to take some risk (… but not too risky…)!

Keep your focus

  • Do not go off topic – do not ramble, over-brag or make self-righteous comments.
  • Prior to writing the essay, outline or web your thoughts to help stay on task.

Write and rewrite

Get a second opinion

  • As a strong writer to read and comment on your essay
  • Do not send your essay unless you have input from others!


  • Run a “spell check
  • Carefully read the essay looking for minor typos
  • Use a checklist to specifically go over each paragraph of the essay.

Applying online is equal to sending an essay the “old fashioned way.”

  • Take the online essay submission seriously, it requires formal writing skills.
  • Do not write similar to when texting or emailing a friend.

Writing Tips for Creating an ‘A’ Caliber Essay

  • Don’t Use:

In my opinion       I think           I feel        I hope             

(We already know. It’s your essay!)

  • Don’t start sentences with and, but, or so.

So I had to leave after the bathroom incident.

      It weakens your essay.  Remember this is formal writing, not a conversation or dialogue in a story.

  • Always start strong! Your thesis and introduction is like making a first impression on your long lost crush.  Don’t jack it up!

Do not flatly announce your topic.

In this essay, I will      …                    The purpose of this essay…

      Sounds weak!  Get into the topic and find a better way to say it. It takes

a bit of practice.  Also, don’t start with a question.

Who, in fact, did exactly let the dogs out?

Again, weak!  This is probably acceptable for students in grades and lower.  Find a better, more direct way of introducing your topic.


  • Your essay should be clearly divided into paragraphs (Indent!! Don’t put an extra space between paragraphs.  Stick to ONE main point per paragraphs.  When you change topics or directions, start a new paragraph.  It lets the reader know VISUALLY that your point has shifted.
  • Finish Strong!  Having a weak conclusion is like blowing a 20 point lead in the fourth quarter.  Your conclusion should do the following:
  • Restate thesis using some of the same language or ‘echoes’ of the same language.
  • Brief summary of main points of the paper
  • End with a conclusive and clear point (never a question)

PROOFREAD!  PROOFREAD!  PROOFREAD!  One, twice, thrice, whatever!  Always print it out to proofread, and try reading it out loud.This is the most overlooked part of the writing process by students by far.


To write your essay perfectly you need to know some common transitional devices, we will cover them in the next post.

Writing Tips for Creating an ‘A’ Caliber Essay Part 2

So, as promised in the previous post, here is a list of some common transitional devices (also called connective words) that can be used to cue your reader in a given way.


again, also, and, and then, besides, equally important, finally, first, further, furthermore, in addition, in the first place, lastly, moreover, next, second, still, too, what is more

cause or effect

accordingly, as a result, because, consequently, due to, since, so, therefore, thus


also, by the same token, just as, likewise, similarly, in the same way


although, although this may be true, and yet, at the same time, but at the same time, compared to, conversely, despite that, even so, even though, for all that, however, in contrast, in spite of, instead, meanwhile, nevertheless, notwithstanding, on the contrary, on the other hand, otherwise, regardless, still, though, whereas, yet


after all, as an illustration, even, for example, for instance, in particular, in this case, in this situation, indeed, in fact, in other words, in short, it is true, of course, namely, specifically, that is, to illustrate, to demonstrate, thus, truly

a time sequence

after a while, afterward, again, also, and then, as long as, at last, at length, at that time, before, besides, earlier, eventually, finally, formerly, further, furthermore, in addition, in the first place, in the past, last, lately, meanwhile, moreover, next, now, presently, second, shortly, simultaneously, since, so far, soon, still, subsequently, then, thereafter, too, until, until now, when


all in all, altogether, as has been said, as has been shown, finally, in brief, in conclusion, in other words, in short, in simpler terms, in summary, lastly, on the whole, taking everything into account, that is, therefore, to summarize, to sum up

50 Ways to Make Your Writing Sound Smart. Part 3

Revise Your Diction:
Experiment with improving your style more of these interesting words to your
own writing.
Special Words.
27. Neat People Words (black-smocked smiths, smattered with smoke).
28. Neat Things (the ethereal medium of joy).
29. Neat States of Being (apparently with no surprise).
30. Neat Places (unrippled lakes).
31. Neat Verbs (warbled).
32. Neat Adjectives (whimsical bubbles of air).
Figurative Language
33. Puns (“Time wounds all heels.”)
34. Neat quotes (“Happiness is a shallow emotion for people who lack brains.”).
35. Oxymoron – a juxtaposition of opposites (mysterious clarity, dazzling uncertainty, jumbo shrimp).
36. Develop a neat title (“Still Waiting for a Dull Moment”).
37. Metaphors (The asphalt was a hot, blackish river.).
38. Alliteration (wounded, wasted, wronged)
39. Rhymes (“As a rule, man’s a fool”).
40. Personification (“Across the sky the daylight crept.”).
41. Litotes (After we knew they were dead, we sat down in a circle and cried a little.”).
42. Hyperbole (I absolutely died when he saw me)
Selection of Detail
43. Sounds (the unnatural barking of a dog).
44. Sights (an avalanche of lumber).
45. Smells (the odor of metal lingers in your nose all day).
46. Tastes
47. Touches
Last minutes thoughts
48. Erase “every word of idiom that has outworn its usefulness.” Orwell
49. Begin with something provocative.
50. “Break any of these rules rather than say anything outright barbarous.” Orwell

That is all, folks. I hope you liked this series, make sure you cover Part 1 and Part 2.

50 Ways to Make Your Writing Sound Smart. Part 2

Welcome to the second part of the Revise Your Paper! series. Before reading this part, make sure you have read the first one!

Sentence Structure Variety
17. Cumulative Sentence –an independent clause following by a number of descriptive phrases.
18. Periodic Sentence –a number of descriptive phrases ending with the main clause.
19. Strung-along Sentence –one in which the emendations are added in the middle,
separating the subject from the verb of the main clause.
20. Short and Simple Sentence –two or three short sentences strung together with
21. Concise Sentence –Every word counts. This should guide all writing, but this sentence
is especially powerful because of its shortness and its omissions.
22. Inverted Sentence –the normal Subject-Verb order is reversed. (I ought, before this, to have replied.”)
Grammar Usage
23. Always used active verbs. Avoid the passive voice.
24. Recast as many “to be” verbs as possible (is, are, was, were).
25. Smash Those Clichés. Take all those worn out phrases from you first and second drafts
and give them life by making them your own.
26. Discovery Sentences. End each paragraph with a “so what” statement that makes an original and personal interpretation of the evidence.

50 Ways to Make Your Writing Sound Smart A.k.a – Revise Your Paper!

Revise your Syntax:
Experiment with improving your style and readability by adding more of these interesting sentence structures to your own writing:
Sentence Beginning Variety
1. Begin with an Adverb (a word that describes the action of the sentence; sometimes a “ly” word)
2. Begin with an Adjective (a word that describes the important person, place. or thing of the sentence)
3. Begin with an Infinitive (to + the verb)
4. Begin with a subordinate clause (a clause that begin with such conjunctions as: after, although, as, as much as, because, before, how, if, in order that, inasmuch as, provided, since, then, that, though, unless, until, when, where, while, etc.
5. Begin with a gerund (a verb form ending in “ing” that acts as the subject of the sentence)
6. Begin with a participle phrase (adjective phrases beginning with a word ending in “ed” or “ing”)
7. Begin with a noun phrase (a noun with additional descriptive phrases attached to it)
8. Use parenthesis to whisper a witty aside to the reader.
9. Use a colon to prepare the reader for the details of an announcement.
10. Use a dash as a sentence interrupter to announce a series, or to elaborate on a
previously stated idea.
11. Use a semicolon to separate different but similar sentences.
12. List more than one item in the same sentence, but since they are similar items, make
them parallel.
13. Add prepositional phrases to interrupt or end the sentence with lively description.
14. Use an appositive, a sentence interrupter that renames the subject, to add more details about an important noun in the sentence.
15. Use a participle phrase, the phrase beginning with a word ending in “ed” or “ing”, to add more details about an important noun in the sentence.
16. Use an absolute phrase, a noun following immediately by a participle phrase to add more details about an important noun in the sentence.

Everything You Need To Know About Chinese Business Etiquette. Part 2

Lunch and dinners

Business etiquette in China involves formal lunch and dinner rules.

  • Seating generally follows a strict code of behavior and is assigned by rank. Don’t sit until your place has been indicated to you.
  • During lunch, humbly wait for the host to start the first toast, and remember to use both the hands when a drink is offered by your host.
  • Women should avoid having a drink during meals in China.
  • Do not place the chopsticks pointing upwards, as this may imply a sad event or death.
    • Also, you may have noticed Chinese people in inexpensive restaurants rubbing their chopsticks together. This is done with cheap, low-quality chopsticks to ensure there are no loose splinters, so don’t do this if you are in a high-end restaurant or in somebody’s home—it would be an insult and would imply that they have provided you with substandard eating equipment.

Business card etiquette

You can carry your printed business card in English, and present it with both hands. Use the Robot Don online essay checker when you need to check the spelling of text. Also reciprocate by receiving the host’s business card graciously. Take time to look at the card and read it immediately instead of putting it in your pocket straightaway. Chinese may consider that as rude behavior.

Apart from these basic rules, try to learn few words of Mandarin (or Cantonese, if you’re in Hong Kong or vicinity) which will create a very good impression. Express your enthusiasm for learning their language.


Small gifts are generally appreciated here during work meetings.

  • Wrap your gift with colorful glittering paper, and avoid choosing white or black paper which indicates grief or sadness.
  • Do not buy anything like sharp objects or knives, since they might think that you are ready to cut away their relationship.
  • Avoid gifts like clocks, handkerchiefs or umbrellas, again because of the symbolism involved.
  • An ideal gift would be a bouquet for the host or a high-quality pen from your country.


In respect to negotiation, Chinese are tough and stubborn, and they have a tendency to delay the deal for any number of reasons. Don’t be discouraged—delay does not mean a lack of interest.

China is becoming increasingly a common destination for foreign investors, and Chinese businesspersons will always take time to compare offers from different potential foreign partners. Also decision making may be delayed for an auspicious star sign or a lucky day.

Dress Code

The dress code is normally conservative suits for men with subtle colors. If you are woman entrepreneur avoid choosing a short sleeved blouse or high heels. Wearing jeans to business meetings is not considered good business etiquette.


Most Chinese businesspersons are accustomed to Western customs, but consider these simple rules for business etiquette in China and your chances of success will be great.

Everything You Need To Know About Chinese Business Etiquette. Part 1

It is imperative to learn the basics about Chinese business etiquette; their culture, values, religion, food habits, dress code, meeting protocol and techniques of negotiation before proceeding on the trip.

China ranks first in world population, and Chinese businesspeople are known for giving great value for relationships and status. A growing economy and a focus on international relations provide excellent opportunities for conducting business in China.

At the outset, you should know that Chinese cannot tolerate excessive display of emotion or loud and abrasive manners. Religion also plays a vital role in day-to-day activities and has great impact on business.

Status and Confucianism

You will also find that Confucian philosophy plays a major role in business; this is a holistic way of looking at how life itself is organized. Confucianism assigns great importance to an individual’s role and how they fulfill that role, and as a result status is very important to them.

Sending a junior team member to the negotiating table for example, would be a major offense. Age and relationship also play an important role in deciding a deal. If you are an elderly person with a good family background, then your job becomes easy.

In keeping with this philosophy, you will find that your Chinese business counterparts are the kind of people who expect loyalty in relationships. Like most countries outside of the U.S., business is never just about business. Before actually talking about your business, you will spend time discussing your family, friends and your hobby, and you may be invited to an introductory dinner (where it is likely that no business will be discussed at all). Establishing a rapport before conducting business is essential for any dealing in China.

Always behave in such a way that the host feels you are very interested in knowing things about their business, the host personally as an individual, and their country. Politeness and patience, and careful attention to business etiquette in China are vital to success. Always maintain a cordial and formal tone in your conversation.

Make a successful Initial contact

  • To begin with, Chinese will always keep their appointments and are punctual in nature. So, plan your trip accordingly and arrange to be on time or even early for your meeting.
  • Address the person by his family’s name to create a good impression.
  • The standard business greeting is to extend both hands for a double-handed handshake. Chinese make many meaningful gestures using the hand and palm, and an open palm is an indication of goodwill.
  • It is suggested to look out for a middleman or junior partner for a pre-meeting discussion, so you can gain more information about your host, who will be the senior negotiator.